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2015-11-10 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Composition Writing: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement - Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion. Yes, I aree with that media pay too much attenstion to the personal lives of celebrities. Whenever I turnn on the TV, I can find many TV programs showing celebrities and their secret life. I feel tired of watching that kind of programs some times. We can not help watching and listening without any choices and judgements. Media tend to ignore viewer or listener to make money recently. To get people's interests, media make gossips between celevrites without any proof also. On the other hand, Peolple may be forced to make media reveal the perosnal lives of celebrities. People want to know how they live and behave because It's our nature. See you later~~ Kelly!!!

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Hi there, Ma\'am [이름]! Thank you for sharing your insight about this issue. The mass media is a matter that touches all our lives. Without cease, virtually every day since early childhood, it has been playing an important role in forming our personality, enriching our background knowledge, providing us with information of any kind. The role of the mass media in the contemporary society is difficult to overestimate. They have become a considerable part of our life. They report about various aspects of life, form and affect public opinion. ~Kelly^^Composition Writing: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement - Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.Yes, I aree with that media pay too much attenstion to the personal lives of celebrities. >> Yes, I agree that media pays too much attention to the personal lives of celebrities. Whenever I turnn on the TV, I can find many TV programs showing celebrities and their secret life. >> Whenever I turn on the TV, I can see many TV programs showing celebrities and their personal life. I feel tired of watching that kind of programs some times. >> I feel tired watching those kinds of programs sometimes. We can not help watching and listening without any choices and judgements. >> Did you mean: We can not help but watch and listen those programs.  Media tend to ignore viewer or listener to make money recently. >> Recently, the media tends to ignore their viewers or listeners in order to make money. To get people\'s interests, media make gossips between celevrites without any proof also. >> To get the people\'s interests, media make gossips among celebrites without any proof also.On the other hand, Peolple may be forced to make media reveal the perosnal lives of celebrities. >> On the other hand, people may be forced to make the media reveal the perosnal lives of celebrities.   People want to know how they live and behave because It\'s our nature. >> People want to know how they live and behave because it\'s our nature to be curious. See you later~~ Kelly!!! >> Correct.

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