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2015-11-24 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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What is the most dangerous or bravest thing you have ever done? Describe it. When I read this question, I try to remind what I have done dangerous or barave thinng. Dangerous thing I have ever experieced is that I had fought with a burgler when I lived a lone about 20 years ago. It was middle of the night, then I was sleeping. but I heard something strange. I opend my eyes and found someone is infront of me. When I was shocked and screamed, the man tried to hit me. but I am a tall girl (170cm)as tall as him, therefore, I fought with him without any cares. He lost the fight and he asked me to be quiet. I said , "OK I will not scream , leave my house". He went out through the main door as like he leaves his house. After he left my house. I watched mirror with fear and I found my face with his foot print. I laughed out and cried out alone in the middile of the night. Imagine! I got his foot print on my face! Hi Kelly? Is this story funny or dangerous? hihihihi Have a good day!!

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Hi there, Ma\'am [이름]! I really enjoyed reading your story. To be honest, I find it fun and dangerous at the same time. Fun because I couldn\'t help but giggle while reading the part that you got his foot print on your face.kkk. Seriously??? hihihi. And, dangerous because he could have hurt you. But, I think you\'ve learned some self defense technique that\'s why you defeated him.  Actually, I was like reading a funny, suspense and thriller story. hihihi. But overall, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for the loads of laughter today! ~Kelly^^ What is the most dangerous or bravest thing you have ever done? Describe it.When I read this question, I try to remind what I have done dangerous or barave thinng. >> When I read this question, I tried to recall what dangerous or brave thing have I done. Dangerous thing I have ever experieced is that I had fought with a burgler when I lived a lone about 20 years ago. >> The dangerous thing that I have experienced was that I fought with a burglar when I lived alone about 20 years ago. It was middle of the night, then I was sleeping. >> It was in the middle of the night while I was sleeping. but I heard something strange. >> I heard something strange. I opend my eyes and found someone is infront of me. >> I opened my eyes and found someone in front of me. >> When I opened my eyes, someone was in front of me. When I was shocked and screamed, the man tried to hit me. >> I was shocked and when I started to scream, the man tried to hit me. but I am a tall girl (170cm)as tall as him, therefore, I fought with him without any cares. >> But I am a tall girl (170cm), as tall as him, therefore, I fought with him without any care. He lost the fight and he asked me to be quiet. >> He lost the fight and asked me to be quiet. I said , \"OK I will not scream , leave my house\". >> Correct. >> I said, \"OK, I will not scream, leave my house\". He went out through the main door as like he leaves his house. >> He went out through the main door just like leaving his house. After he left my house. I watched mirror with fear and I found my face with his foot print. >> After he left my house, I watched the mirror with fear and found his foot print on my face.I laughed out and cried out alone in the middile of the night. >> Correct. Imagine! I got his foot print on my face! >> Correct.Hi Kelly! Is this story fun or dangerous? hihihihi >> Correct. Have a good day!! >> Correct.

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