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Hi there, Ma\'am [이름]!
It\'s a good day again! You are definitely right! If we have ALL the freedom that we want, then the world would be in chaos. There won\'t be rules anymore because we won\'t follow them anyway. But we can have freedom to do the things that we want as long as we do not hurt the faculties of other people. Anyway, you are really lucky to have a very loving and understanding husband. But I\'m pretty sure, that he is also lucky to have you as his wife.^^ Thanks for sending such a great composition today! Thanks for being consistent.
~Kelly^^
Do you have as much freedom as you want in your life?
If someone have freedom as much as he/she wants, world will be chaos.
>> If someone has freedom as much as he/she wants, the world will be in chaos.
I think no one can feel free as much as they want.
>> Correct.
Therfore, I cannot feel free as much as I want in my life.
>> Correct.
I have to work when I want to skip my work.
>> Correct.
I have to follow the traffic lights when I drive.
>> Correct.
I have to pay for tastless dishes although I want to run away.
>> Correct.
I have to meet freinds altough I don\'t want to see them.
>> Correct.
But I have enuogh freedom in my life.
>> Correct.
***enough
I can buy what I want within my budget.
>> Correct.
I can sleep as long as I want on weekends.
>> Correct.
I can go to anywhere without caring my family.
>> I can go anywhere without worrying my family.
I can drink as much as I want without concerning my husband.
>> I can drink as much as I want without being concerned about my husband.
If someone has to sacrifice for my freedom, it must be my husband.
>> Correct.
He always follow and respect my decision in order to make me happy.
>> He always follows and respects my decision in order to make me happy.
Oh~~ I have to thank to my husband.
>> Oh~~ I have to thank my husband.
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