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Hi there, Ma\'am [이름]!
Thank you for sharing new opinion about robots. I like what you said, \"to dream of a peaceful and beautiful world with robots.\" Have a great evening~
~Kelly^^
How will the innovation of a robot companion influence the growth of children, teenagers, and adults?
To the growth of children, robot can be their friend and also can be a teacher.
>> To the growth of children, a robot can be their friend and also their teacher.
Robot can do many things for children instead of theri mother, such as reading a book, singing together and survaillence.
>> A robot can do many things for children instead of their mother, such as reading a book, singing together and doing a survey.
To teengers, robot can be a diary, becuase teenagers have many secrets hidden from their parents.
>> To teengers, a robot can be a diary, because they have many secrets hidden from their parents.
Robot keep their secrets forever as long as it\'s not broken.
>> A robot could keep their secrets forever as long as it\'s not broken.
To adults, robot can be a sincere maid.
>> For adults, a robot can be a sincere maid.
it can do every thing what I order without any complaint.
>> It can do everything that I order without any complaint.
I love this function.
>> Correct.
Robot can be our frind and usful machinery.
>> A robot can be a friend and a useful machinery.
But it has taken and still it takes away our jobs, therefore unemployment increase and the poor will be poorer.
>> But it has taken and still takes away our jobs, therefore unemployment increases and the poor will be poorer.
Moreover, If robot has interllect like in movies, human chould be conroled by robot.
>> Moreover, if robots have intellect just like in movies, humans could be controlled by them.
Hi~~ Kelly~~
>> Correct.
It\'s so difficult subject to me.
>> It\'s a very difficult subject to me.
I want to dream a peaceful and beautiful world with robot.
>> I want to dream of a peaceful and beautiful world with robots.
I don\'t want to think too deeply. kkkk
>> Correct.
Have a nice day!!
>> Correct.
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