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We are often treated unfairly during we live the world.
I think that this cases usually originate from the sense of discrimination.
A few days ago I ever read from the newspaper that a Muslim woman got turned down an order for meal in a restaurant in France.
The restaurant owner said,"I refused her order because all Muslims are terrorists."
It is ridiculous how these are possible.
If so, more than 1 billion Muslims are all terrorists?
Also now someone of the French is committing a crime.
If so, all French people are bad?
This is certainly based on a racial discrimination and religious discrimination.
If they discriminate against others, they will be also discriminated by others somewhere.
I think we should fight against all kind of unfair treatment.
For the abolishing discrimination and the peace of all mankind~~~.
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Hi there Sir!
Thanks for sharing your your opinion regarding the topic.
I agree with your opinions. I believe that despite differences in race and religion, people must be equally treated.
Anyway, enjoy your Chuseok! See you on Monday.
~Teacher Shanee
We are often treated unfairly during we live the world.
>>> We are often treated unfairly in this world.I think that this cases usually originate from the sense of discrimination.
>>> I think that this happens because of discrimination among people.A few days ago I ever read from the newspaper that a Muslim woman got turned down an order for meal in a restaurant in France.
>>> A few days ago, I read from the newspaper that a Muslim woman got turned down an order for a meal in a restaurant in France.The restaurant owner said,\"I refused her order because all Muslims are terrorists.\"
>>> Correct! It is ridiculous how these are possible.
>>> It is ridiculous to believe such thing.If so, more than 1 billion Muslims are all terrorists?
>>> If this is true, then more than one billion Muslims are all terrorists.Also now someone of the French is committing a crime.
>>> Also, even people from France are committing crimes.If so, all French people are bad?
>>> Does that mean that all French are bad?This is certainly based on a racial discrimination and religious discrimination.
>>> Correct! If they discriminate against others, they will be also discriminated by others somewhere.
>>> Correct!I think we should fight against all kind of unfair treatment.
>>> I think we should fight against all kinds of unfair treatment.For the abolishing discrimination and the peace of all mankind~~~.
>>> It is for the abolishment of discrimination and peace of all mankind.
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