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2016-09-13 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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We are often treated unfairly during we live the world. I think that this cases usually originate from the sense of discrimination. A few days ago I ever read from the newspaper that a Muslim woman got turned down an order for meal in a restaurant in France. The restaurant owner said,"I refused her order because all Muslims are terrorists." It is ridiculous how these are possible. If so, more than 1 billion Muslims are all terrorists? Also now someone of the French is committing a crime. If so, all French people are bad? This is certainly based on a racial discrimination and religious discrimination. If they discriminate against others, they will be also discriminated by others somewhere. I think we should fight against all kind of unfair treatment. For the abolishing discrimination and the peace of all mankind~~~.

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Hi there Sir! Thanks for sharing your your opinion regarding the topic. I agree with your opinions. I believe that despite differences in race and religion, people must be equally treated. Anyway, enjoy your Chuseok! See you on Monday.   ~Teacher Shanee   We are often treated unfairly during we live the world. >>> We are often treated unfairly in this world.I think that this cases usually originate from the sense of discrimination. >>> I think that this happens because of discrimination among people.A few days ago I ever read from the newspaper that a Muslim woman got turned down an order for meal in a restaurant in France. >>> A few days ago, I read from the newspaper that a Muslim woman got turned down an order for a meal in a restaurant in France.The restaurant owner said,\"I refused her order because all Muslims are terrorists.\" >>> Correct! It is ridiculous how these are possible. >>>  It is ridiculous to believe such thing.If so, more than 1 billion Muslims are all terrorists? >>> If this is true, then more than one billion Muslims are all terrorists.Also now someone of the French is committing a crime. >>> Also, even people from France are committing crimes.If so, all French people are bad? >>> Does that mean that all French are bad?This is certainly based on a racial discrimination and religious discrimination. >>> Correct! If they discriminate against others, they will be also discriminated by others somewhere. >>>  Correct!I think we should fight against all kind of unfair treatment. >>> I think we should fight against all kinds of unfair treatment.For the abolishing discrimination and the peace of all mankind~~~. >>> It is for the abolishment of discrimination and peace of all mankind.

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