Home Work

Hi Larry! ^.^

A blissful Tuesday to you! ^^

Thank you very much for making your homework again! ^^.

I would like to commend you for making a good composition.

You made me imagine your writing, and I enjoyed it.

Thanks a lot! ^^,

By the way, I would like you to check your composition.

You made a good writing, but you need to consider the following to improve and have better compositions in the future:

1. Capitalization;

2. Punctuation Marks;

3. Spacing; and

4. Parts of Speech.

That\'s all for this time! ^^

See you in a bit! ^^,

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

The thing I created when I was a child is a paper-airplane.

>> The thing I created when I was a child was a paper airplane.

It was in 2 of primary school.

>> I did it when I was in second grade.

>> OR: I did it when I was in 2nd grade.

We were studying in a science.
>> We were studying Science.

>> OR: We were having a Science class.

we had a time to make our own paper-airplane.

>> We had a time to make our own paper airplanes.

>> OR: We had a chance to make our own paper airplanes.

Teacher said, After making it, We will go out and we are having competition on the play-ground.
>> Our teacher said, after making them, we would go out and have a competition on the playground.

>> OR: Our teacher said, \"After making them, we will go out and have a competition on the playground.\"

I was the person who can\'t sleep with losing.

>> I was a person who couldn\'t sleep with losing.

So,I considered how to make it properly.
>> So, I considered how to make it properly.

>> OR: I was a person who couldn\'t sleep with losing so I considered how to make it properly.

When we go it through air, It tend to go falling around like spring shape.
>> When we threw them in the air, they tended to fall around like leaves in spring.

I thought It\'s caused by unbalance.

>> I thought it\'s caused by unbalanced structure.

>> OR: I thought they were like that because they were not made perfectly. 

I wanted It\'s going ahead straightly.
>> I wanted my plane to fly straight.

So, I decided to put a pencil in the middle.

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: So, I decided to put one of my pencils on top of it which is in the middle.

My heart was fluttering.

>> CORRECT!

All of us was ready for having competition.
>> All of us were ready for having the competition.

We went out and threw our paper-airplane in a race.

>> We went out and threw our paper airplanes in a race.

In first race I had a great grade.

>> In the first race, I had a great grade.

Only five people was picked up for the second race.

>> Only five people were picked for the second race.

>> OR: Only five people were picked for the second round of the game.

Finally, In the final race I came a winner in about 35 child.
>> Finally, in the final race, I came to be the winner over around 35 children.
I really want to write the article without confusing hh
>> I really want to write the article without confusion. Haha!

>> OR: I really want to write the article without confusing you. Haha!

have happy tuesday, paola!!^^

>> Have a happy Tuesday, Paula!! ^^