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Who is your role model?
My role model is Sejong King, the fourth monarch of Joseon Kingdom.
He ascended the throne in 1418 and died in 1450 at the age of 54.
He is best known for his initiative to create Hangeul, the Korean alphabet.
While I was traveling along Namhan River, I stopped by his tomb two weeks ago.
I watched many his inventions. Many Koreans respect him. I also supposed to get his face tattoo on my body like many people do. I heard he loved to read book, although he was a third son, who wouldn't ascend throne. So, he could just play and hang around. He was not perpefect king because he was not good at martial arts, but he was good at studying and dealing with people. Let me boast Korean alphabet, it's only one alphabet that we know who created around the world. And also, it's No.1 alphabet we can pronounce the most. I have also a role model who alive. He is Tae Hee, my friend. It never be written over 1000 words. So, I must to quit here. Cheers!
강사 첨삭
Dear [Name],
A truly wonderful Tuesday to you! ^.^
Honestly speaking, I envy you when it comes to your alphabet.
You have used the letters of your alphabet very well.
It has been used from the day King Sejong introduced it to Koreans until now.
We, Filipinos, also have our own alphabet.
However, I think it is not unique.
I am a little sad about it.
Anyway, that\'s all for now! ^^
Don\'t forget to see the corrections and suggestions I put for your writing improvement.
Happy reading! ^^,
See you later! ^^.
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
Who is your role model?My role model is Sejong King, the fourth monarch of Joseon Kingdom. >> My role model is King Sejong, the fourth monarch of Joseon Kingdom.
>> OR: My role model is King Sejong who is the fourth monarch of Joseon Dynasty.
He ascended the throne in 1418 and died in 1450 at the age of 54.>> CORRECT!
He is best known for his initiative to create Hangeul, the Korean alphabet.>> CORRECT!
>> OR: He is best known for his initiative to create Hanguel which is the Korean alphabet.
While I was traveling along Namhan River, I stopped by his tomb two weeks ago.>> Two weeks ago, while I was traveling along Namhan River, I stopped by his tomb.
I watched many his inventions.
>> I saw many of his inventions.
>> OR: I saw a lot of his inventions.
Many Koreans respect him.
>> CORRECT!
I also supposed to get his face tattoo on my body like many people do.
>> I also supposed to get his face tattooed in my body like many people do.
I heard he loved to read book, although he was a third son, who wouldn\'t ascend throne.
>> I heard he loved reading books although he was a third son, who wouldn\'t ascend the throne.
So, he could just play and hang around.
>> So, he could just have played and hanged around.
He was not perpefect king because he was not good at martial arts, but he was good at studying and dealing with people.
>> He was not a perfect king, because he was not good at martial arts, but he was good at studying and dealing with people.
Let me boast Korean alphabet, it\'s only one alphabet that we know who created around the world.
>> Let me boast the Korean alphabet. It\'s the only alphabet in the world that we know who created it.
And also, it\'s No.1 alphabet we can pronounce the most.
>> And also, it\'s the No. 1 alphabet we can learn easily.
>> OR: In addition, it\'s the easiest alphabet that we can learn.
I have also a role model who alive.
>> I also have a role model who is alive.
He is Tae Hee, my friend.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: He is Tae Hee. He is my friend.
It never be written over 1000 words.
>> I can\'t write more than 1000 words here.
So, I must to quit here.
>> So, I must quit here.
>> OR: So I must stop writing here.
Cheers!
>> CORRECT!
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