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2017-11-23 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of the improvement in the standard of living. How far do you agree or disagree? I absolutely agree. I attacked by dust storm from China every years in Korea. So I have to equip the mask to protect my lungs and nose in spring and autumn even in summer. There was no sand storm in Korea Only 15 years ago. I think reason why China make desert by cutting many trees as China developed. So I absolutely agree that Improvement in the standard of living result in damage to the environment.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much for doing your homework, [이름]^^

We might be enjoying this kind of lifestyle, but we must remember that damage it gives to our environment TT

See you tomorrow!

Damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of the improvement in the standard of living. How far do you agree or disagree?
I absolutely agree.

>>CORRECT!

I attacked by dust storm from China every years in Korea.

>>Korea is attacked by dust storm from China every year.

So I have to equip the mask to protect my lungs and nose in spring and autumn even in summer.

>>Therefore, I have to use a mask to protect my lungs and nose in spring and autumn, even in summer.

There was no sand storm in Korea Only 15 years ago.

>>There was no sand storm in Korea until 15 years ago.

I think reason why China make desert by cutting many trees as China developed.

>>I think the reason is that China has a lot of deserts now by cutting many trees as this country developed.
So I absolutely agree that Improvement in the standard of living result in damage to the environment.

>>Thus, I absolutely agree that improvement in the standard of living results in environmental damage.

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