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Nicely done, Mr. [이름]! I would love to donate my blood as well but sadly I\'m afraid of needles >.< You did great, I just had to combine some of your sentences together to make them more coherent. Take care and have a happy weekend! ~Teacher Elisha
 I`ve been volunteered at a facility when i was a univ.student.

>> I volunteered at a facility when I was a university student.

At that time my role was dividing food for the elders.

>> At that time, my role was to divide food for the elders.

But thesedays, I donates my blood bimonthly.

>> But these days, I donate my blood bimonthly.

because after getting job, It can`t help but donating my blood for my community.

>> After getting a job, I can\'t help but to donate my blood for my community.

I think, It help to make better society.

>> I think, it can help make the society a better place.

It is my aim to receive gold medal which will be offerd by the goverment. If you attend blood donation over 50 times, you can obtain it.

>> It is my aim to receive a gold medal which will be offerd by the government if you donate your blood for more than 50 times.