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학생이 쓴 원문
Importance of playing game is ,first, some games could make smart. Second, like you give treat to the dog after train the dog,if you don\'t play game you won\'t study or you won\'t do something. Third , the video games makes you after you are tired of doing something. Force, the video games will makes you fun or happy. Bad thing about video game is your eye might be bad. And you might play game for ours. And you might just think of game, that you can\'t do something else. And if you play game a lot, you won\'t exercise and you won\'t be healthy.
강사 첨삭
Hi Luca! Your homework is good today. It seems that you have a great interest when it comes to games.
Until the next one! ^_^
See you in class! :)
~Teacher Sheila
>>The first importance of playing games is that some games could make us smart.
Second, like you give treat to the dog after train the dog,if you don\'t play game you won\'t study or you won\'t do something.
>>Second is just like giving a treat to a dog after training it. If you don\'t study and won\'t do something useful, then you will not play games.
Third , the video games makes you after you are tired of doing something.
>>Third, video games make you relax after being tired of doing a lot of things.
Force, the video games will makes you fun or happy.
>>Fourth, video games will give you fun and happiness.
OR>>Fourth, video games will make you happy.
Bad thing about video game is your eye might be bad.
>>The bad thing about video games is your eyes might get worse.
And you might play game for ours.
>>And you might play games for hours.
OR>>And you might play a game for hours.
And you might just think of game, that you can\'t do something else.
>>And you might always be thinking of games that you can\'t do something else.
OR>>And you might always be thinking of the game that you can\'t do anything else.
And if you play game a lot, you won\'t exercise and you won\'t be healthy.
>>And if you play games a lot, you won\'t be able to exercise and won\'t be healthy.
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