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I think it\'s really good system for worker.
>>> I think its a good system for the workers.
You know, the lifespan of human is almost 100year-old. So one
job is not enough for life.
>>> You know that the lifespan of
humans is almost 100 years old. So, having one job is not enough in life.
Doing one job whole life can be boring and make people fall
into a mannerism.
>>> Doing the same job in whole life
it’s boring and make people fall into a mannerism.
So, with four-day work, we can learn other kinds of work and
find another talents.
>>> So, with a four day-work, we
can learn other kinds of works and find our new talents and skills.
For example, i want to be a electrician of plants but i want
to be a baker and run a cafe someday.
>>> For example, I’m an electrician
but, I want to be a baker and run a cafe someday.
So, i am planning to learn bake and coffee using everyweek
3days of holiday.
>>> So, I’m planning to study
baking and coffee making by having 3 days off every week.
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