Home work(Aug 10)

2018-08-10 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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Homework: Do you have a vision of a better society? What changes would you make? Explain your answer. Answer: Our country, Korea, has the problem that is being an aging society. But people do not wanna have a baby, despite support to a lot of child maintenance. In my opinion, the reason is education system of our country. So the government gotta change the education system, not the short-term supporting child maintenance. But... who would resolve this problem. we do not know. ;(

강사 첨삭

Hello, Jun!

Thank you so much for doing your homework ^^

Have a great night and a wonderful weekend ☺

Our country, Korea, has the problem that is being an aging society.
>> CORRECT

But people do not wanna have a baby, despite support to a lot of child maintenance.
>> However, people don\'t want to have a baby because it\'s expensive.

In my opinion, the reason is education system of our country.
>> In my opinion, the reason is the education system in our country.

So the government gotta change the education system, not the short-term supporting child maintenance.
>> So, the government needs to change the education system not the short-term supporting child maintenance.

But... who would resolve this problem. we do not know. ;(

>> Who would resolve this problem? We don\'t know.

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