home work: what are the influences of technology on human lives?
학생이 쓴 원문
In Morden society We cannot imagine to live without technology, that much technology is important to human lives.
Technology make our lives more comfortable and easily. for example, we are able to contact to anyone easily in the world with internet. Also ,we can go anywhere in the world, even we are dreaming to travel to Moon and other planets in the future.
In addition, we are able to find diseases and be treated more simple and earlier with medical technology.that\'s why life expectancy is getting older and older.
However, technology is not always having good sides. Sometimes, some reckless development of technology destroy ecosystem and Environment. so that there are many environmental problems such as Global warming, drought.
Also, Dependence of using mobile phone and Computer addiction comes up as a problem in Morden society.
Finally, we make good use of the advantages and we need to make a effort to overcome the disadvantages.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
I\'m happy to read your thoughts.
Please be careful on your spelling and capitalization.
Here are my corrections.
In Morden society We cannot imagine to live without technology, that much technology is important to human lives.
>> In modern society, we cannot imagine to live without technology. Technology is important to human lives.
Technology make our lives more comfortable and easily.
>>Technology makes our lives more comfortable and easier.
for example, we are able to contact to anyone easily in the world with internet.
>> For example, we are able to contact anyone easily in the world with the internet.
Also ,we can go anywhere in the world, even we are dreaming to travel to Moon and other planets in the future.
>>Also , we can go anywhere in the world, even dreaming to travel to the moon and other planets.
In addition, we are able to find diseases and be treated more simple and earlier with medical technology.that\'s why life expectancy is getting older and older.
>> In addition, we are able to find diseases and be treated simpler and earlier with the medical technology. That\'s why life expectancy is getting older and older.
However, technology is not always having good sides. Sometimes, some reckless development of technology destroy ecosystem and Environment. so that there are many environmental problems such as Global warming, drought.
>> However, technology does not always good. Sometimes, reckless development of technology destroys the ecosystem and the environment. So, there are many environmental problems such as global warming and droughts.
Also, Dependence of using mobile phone and Computer addiction comes up as a problem in Morden society.
>> Also, addiction on mobile phone and computer came up as problems in the modern society.
Finally, we make good use of the advantages and we need to make a effort to overcome the disadvantages.
>> Finally, we value its advantages and we need to make an effort to overcome the disadvantages.
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