Homeless

2022-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I don\'t have any idea about that topic\'s knowledge. Sometimes when I walked the street I saw the homeless people often. And the season becomeing the winter I\'m very worried about them. Every homeless people have a sad story and hard reason to be a homeless. But the goverment give it to help homeless using taxes, it\'s not good to way. I think it\'s almost not good idea but in my personal opinion, government give it to help find them work and job.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ann:) 

This is a good idea. Maybe this can be a great impact for them to get back on their feet and make their lives better. 

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I don\'t have any idea about that topic\'s knowledge.
>>I don\'t have any idea about that topic. 

Sometimes when I walked the street I saw the homeless people often.
>> Sometimes when I walk on the streets, I see homeless people often. 

And the season becomeing the winter I\'m very worried about them.
>> Since it is winter, I am very worries about them. 

Every homeless people have a sad story and hard reason to be a homeless.
>> Every homeless people have a sad story and hard reason why they are homeless. 

But the goverment give it to help homeless using taxes, it\'s not good to way.
>> But the government give help to homeless people using taxes which is not a good thing. 

I think it\'s almost not good idea but in my personal opinion, government give it to help find them work and job
>> I think it\'s almost not a good idea. But in my personal opinion, the government should help them find jobs. 

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