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There aren\'t any definite characteristics a person must possess in order to succeed.
I believe that each person has a unique trait he must nourish^^
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There are many important skills that a person should learn to be successful in the world today.
>>CORRECT!
Above all, I think creativity and socialbility are the most important abilities.
>> Above all, I think creativity and sociability are the most important abilities.
First, our world is quite complex and various because there are a lot of information and new things.
>>CORRECT!
IfI am not different with other people, our world can\'t interest me.
>> If I am not different from other people, our world can\'t interest me.
That is, If I\'m very creative, it is easier to enter to famous companies or good universities.
>>That is, if I\'m very creative, it is easier to enter famous companies or good universities.
Next, we can not live alone perfectly because a person is social animal.
>> Next, we can not live alone perfectly because a person is a social animal.
So, a person who drinks alcohol well and is good at greeting can fly firstly or far than other people.
>>So, a person who drinks alcohol well and is good at greeting can fly first or farther than other people.
Therefore, to learn those abilities, we have to read books frequently, travel other areas, adventure new things and think existing things to newly, differently.
>>Therefore, to learn those abilities, we have to read books frequently, travel to other areas, adventure new things and think existing things to newly, differently.
Moreover, we should practice how to smile and say kinly.
>>Moreover, we should practice how to smile and talk kindly.
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