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2016-07-13 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Some people around me like to fish as a their hobby.and they just enjoy it. they don`t eat them. they just let them go back in the water after they`ve caught them.i don`t understand them. and I don`t agree fishing for the sports. think living animals can suffer pain.It is truly sad and cruel. It`s okay If we should eat fish for intake protain and other nutrients.but I don`t agree If they catch fish for their personal desires. I also disagree fishing for sports.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Sylvia!^^
You are very diligent and I want to

thank you for doing your homework again!^^

Just be careful with some sentence patterns.
I checked some of them so I hope you will also find time

in reviewing them.

~~Teacher Erine

Some people around me like to fish as a their hobby.

>> Correct

and they just enjoy it.

>> Correct
 they don`t eat them.

>> Correct

they just let them go back in the water after they`ve caught them.

>> Correct

i don`t understand them.

>> Correct

and I don`t agree fishing for the sports.

>> And I don\'t agree with fishing as a sport.
 think living animals can suffer pain.

>> Living animals can suffer.

It is truly sad and cruel.

>> Correct
 It`s okay If we should eat fish for intake protain and other nutrients.

>> It\'s okay if we eat fish to intake protein and other nutrients.

but I don`t agree If they catch fish for their personal desires.

>> Correct

I also disagree fishing for sports.

>> I also disagree that fishing is a sport.

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