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2016-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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I think minority of students also should be respected.so school should provide low fat and vegetarian lunch for them we have been living in uniform community .we have to lead all students as a healthy and creative person. and make them a person who give consider for others.we need to be gradually changed.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Sylvia.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts

about our topic for today.

Let\'s have more topics next time.

I will definitely see you soon.

Take care!
~~Teacher Erine~~

I think minority of students also should be respected.

>> I think minority of students should also be respected.

so school should provide low fat and vegetarian lunch for them we have been living in uniform community.

>> So school should provide a low fat and vegetarian lunch for them. We have been living in a uniform community.

we have to lead all students as a healthy and creative person.

>> Correct

and make them a person who give consider for others.

>> and make them a person who give consideration to others.

we need to be gradually changed.

>> Correct

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