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2016-07-22 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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If i go traveling to the space, i will choose a scientist among them. Because he has a lot of knowledge about the space and spaceship. first of all my biggest concern is whther we can go back to the earth. and he can repair the spaceship whenever it is broken. And he will reflect the experience in to the scientific advancement. finally we can enjoy the traveling with his description(explanation).

강사 첨삭

Happy Firday, Sylvia!^^

Thank you for sharing your thoughts

about going to the space.

If you ask me my opinion, I will just want to be

with a handsome and intelligent guy. kkk

See you then!
~~Teacher Erine~~

If i go traveling to the space, i will choose a scientist among them.

>> If I go traveling to the space, I will choose a scientist among them.
 Because he has a lot of knowledge about the space and spaceship.

>> Correct
 first of all my biggest concern is whther we can go back to the earth.

>> First of all. my biggest concern is whether we can go back to Earth.
 and he can repair the spaceship whenever it is broken.

>> And if he can repair the spaceship whenever it\'s broken.
 And he will reflect the experience in to the scientific advancement.

>> I will also consider whether he will reflect the experience in to a scientific advancement.
 finally we can enjoy the traveling with his description(explanation).

>> If so, finally, we can enjoy traveling with his explanation.

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