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Hello Sylvia! Thank you once again for this. I appreciate the effort. Very well said. I think awareness through education is necessary for people to know more about this problem.
- T. Beth
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Pople have developed industries for our high quality lifestyle but these are destroyed people by environmental pollution.
>>>> People have developed industries for our high quality lifestyle but these are destroyed by people because of environmental pollution.
however,we don`t want go back to the past that we lived in poverty.
>>>> However, we don`t want go back to the past when we lived in poverty.
Therefore,we have to solve this huge probles.
>>>> Therefore, we have to solve this huge problems.
First, most of air pollution substances shuld be strictly controled by regulations and we create other cleaner fuels and sue it.
>>>> First, most of air pollution substances should be strictly controled by regulations and we create other cleaner fuels to use.
we also have to develop public transport infrastructures and we shouldn`t use individual cars as much as possible.
>>>> CORRECT. (We also have to develop public transport infrastructures and we shouldn`t use individual cars as much as possible.)
lastly,we also have to get a awaremess of environmental problems how serious by education.
>>>> Lastly, we also have awareness on how serious environmental problems are through education.
we need to reduce using disposable products.
>>>> CORRECT. (We need to reduce using disposable products.)
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