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2019-01-28 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> What do you think is the best way to solve the air pollution? Pople have developed industries for our high quality lifestyle but these are destroyed people by environmental pollution. however,we don`t want go back to the past that we lived in poverty.Therefore,we have to solve this huge probles. First, most of air pollution substances shuld be strictly controled by regulations and we create other cleaner fuels and sue it. we also have to develop public transport infrastructures and we shouldn`t use individual cars as much as possible.lastly,we also have to get a awaremess of environmental problems how serious by education.we need to reduce using disposable products.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sylvia! Thank you once again for this. I appreciate the effort. Very well said. I think awareness through education is necessary for people to know more about this problem.

- T. Beth

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Pople have developed industries for our high quality lifestyle but these are destroyed people by environmental pollution.

>>>> People have developed industries for our high quality lifestyle but these are destroyed by people because of environmental pollution.     
however,we don`t want go back to the past that we lived in poverty.

>>>>  However, we don`t want go back to the past when we lived in poverty. 

Therefore,we have to solve this huge probles.

>>>>  Therefore, we have to solve this huge problems. 
First, most of air pollution substances shuld be strictly controled by regulations and we create other cleaner fuels and sue it.

>>>> First, most of air pollution substances should be strictly controled by regulations and we create other cleaner fuels to use.  
we also have to develop public transport infrastructures and we shouldn`t use individual cars as much as possible.

>>>>   CORRECT. (We also have to develop public transport infrastructures and we shouldn`t use individual cars as much as possible.)

lastly,we also have to get a awaremess of environmental problems how serious by education.

>>>>  Lastly, we also have awareness on how serious environmental problems are through education.

we need to reduce using disposable products.

>>>>  CORRECT. (We need to reduce using disposable products.)


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