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2012-11-17 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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November the 19th is World Toilet Day (WTD). This day celebrates the importance of something we never action think about too much � the toilet. Imagine waste without one. There are many world issues regarding toilets. WTD is a global day of really to raise awareness of the fact that millions of people have no clean toilet. This creates serious health problems in many countries. No toilets or sewage systems means human life is in the streets. This gets into the water supply and affects crops. WTD is run by the World Toilet Organization. This is a worldwide non-profit group that aims to increase the number of toilets in poor countries. It has a global network of over 200 different organizations in 56 countries

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Hello there! WOW! Very informative compostition you have. Thank you so much for sharing me your knowledge about this topic. Have time to check the corrections here. Thanks once again see you in class^^ T.Michelle November the 19th is World Toilet Day (WTD). >>On November 19th, it is World Toilet Day (WTD). This day celebrates the importance of something we never action think about too much � the toilet. >>On this they, it empahasizes the importance of an action we never think about that much, it is the toilet. Imagine waste without one. >>Did you mean: Imagine life without excreting our wastes. There are many world issues regarding toilets. >>Correct WTD is a global day of really to raise awareness of the fact that millions of people have no clean toilet. >>Wtd is a global day to raise the awareness and fact about not cleaning the toilet. This creates serious health problems in many countries. >>Correct No toilets or sewage systems means human life is in the streets. >>Correct This gets into the water supply and affects crops. >>Correct WTD is run by the World Toilet Organization. >>Correct This is a worldwide non-profit group that aims to increase the number of toilets in poor countries. >>Correct It has a global network of over 200 different organizations in 56 countries >>Correct (Just don\'t forget your punctuation mark-period)    

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