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What do you think about religion in general? I have read a book which is related with a kind of culture. And it is also related with religion as well. In the book, the author wrote the differences between oriental and western people. The writer describes Oriental people who have conservative characteristic. So they are more believe in the eternal cycle of birth. On the other hand, westerns are described as a progressive people and they believe in heaven and hell. In my personal opinion, I partly believe in both of the thing. Soul will go to the other planet which is too far humans never reach using technology and get the other life there. If he gets wealth life it would be a heaven. However, if he is born in the area suffering like a starvation, drought, or horrible war, then it might be considered as a hell. Anyways, I think most of religion are the same. They have almost same stories, and have a god. They try to gather believers since they have eventual goal to make money.

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What do you think about religion in general?

I have read a book which is related with a kind of culture. And it is also related with religion as well.

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or>>There is this book which I have read and it is related with a particular culture, including religion.

In the book, the author wrote the differences between oriental and western people.

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or>>The author wrote in the book about the various distinctions between people in the east and people in the west.

The writer describes Oriental people who have conservative characteristic.

>>The writer describes oriental people who have conservative characteristics.

So they are more believe in the eternal cycle of birth.

>>So, they believe more in the eternal cycle of birth.

or>>That is why they have more faith in the eternal cycle of birth.

On the other hand, westerns are described as a progressive people and they believe in heaven and hell.

>>On the other hand, westerners are described as a progressive people, so they believe in heaven and hell.

In my personal opinion, I partly believe in both of the thing.

>>In my personal opinion, I partly believe in both things.

or>>Personally, I partly believe in both.

Soul will go to the other planet which is too far humans never reach using technology and get the other life there.

>>The soul of men will go to a planet, which is too far and humans can never reach even with advanced technology, and will have a second life there.

If he gets wealth life it would be a heaven.

>>If he gets wealthy and have a happy life, it would be heaven for that person.

However, if he is born in the area suffering like a starvation, drought, or horrible war, then it might be considered as a hell.

>>However, if he is born in that area with suffering like starvation, drought, or be in a horrible war, then it might be a form of hell for that person.

Anyways, I think most of religion are the same.

>>Anyways, I think most of the religions are the same.

They have almost same stories, and have a god.

>>They have almost the same stories and they also have a god.

They try to gather believers since they have eventual goal to make money.

>>They try to gather believers since they have an eventual goal of making some money.