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2016-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

While we travel, we need a lot of money. When I was young I couldn't know about things. So when I want to travel somewhere, I first save much money for a long time. Nowadays many young people go to travel without much money. I envy their youth and their bravery.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름],

When I was younger I haven\'t thought of traveling abroad but now that I\'ve tried it, I feel like I must earn to be able to travel to a lot of places. So I understand what you are trying to say. Very good sentences Ms. [이름]! See you!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

While we travel, we need a lot of money.

>>correct

OR>> When we travel, we need a lot of money.
When I was young I couldn\'t know about things.

>>correct!
So when I want to travel somewhere, I first save much money for a long time.

>>correct!

OR>> So if I want to travel somewhere, I have to save a lot of money first.
Nowadays many young people go to travel without much money.

>>correct!
I envy their youth and their bravery.

>>correct!

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