Homework - 6

I agree. I think that the challenge is very important in our life. If we never give up, we can success. Although, If we can't success, the challenge is very beautfiul. Lesson 3. At present, I live in the countryside. I like the countryside because there is a lot of fresh air. It is very important for our life. The countryside is very quite and nice. However I want to live in the city that is an environment made for education. In the city like Seoul, there are many cars and pollution. I don't like Seoul.(Seoul is Korea's capital.) I will move to a small city called Pyeongtaek. This place will be develop after 3 years. So, I have to save a lot of money to move there.

Hello there [이름]! ^^ Good work in expressing your opinions and ideas. Most of your sentences are correct although we still need to work on the comprehensibility or the flow of thought (The corrections demonstrate this better, kindly read through them. ^^). You write very good simple sentences but challenge yourself writing compound and complex sentences. Lastly, notice the second to the last sentence correction. In writing numbers, the general rule is, if the number is less than ten, spell out the number but if it is more than ten, you can use the numerical form.   A wonderful job all in all. ^^   See you in class! ^^   ==Teacher Bella==     I agree.I think that the challenge is very important in our life. >> I agree that challenges are very important in our lives. If we never give up, we can success.Although, If we can\'t success, the challenge is very beautfiul. >> If we never give up, we can be successful and if not, the challenge is still very beautiful.Lesson 3.At present, I live in the countryside. >> CORRECT I like the countryside because there is a lot of fresh air. It is very important for our life. >> I like living in the countryside because there is fresh air which is important in our lives. The countryside is very quite and nice.However I want to live in the city that is an environment made for education. >> The countryside is a very quiet and nice place to live in but I would also like to live in a city which is an ideal place to get an education. In the city like Seoul, there are many cars and pollution. I don\'t like Seoul.(Seoul is Korea\'s capital.) >>  I don\'t like Seoul, Korea\'s capital city, because there are many cars and pollution.I will move to a small city called Pyeongtaek. This place will be develop after 3 years. >> I prefer to move in Pyeongtaek which is a small city that will be developed in three years. So, I have to save a lot of money to move there. >> I would need to save a lot of money to move there.