homework - December 10th

2018-12-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

학생이 쓴 원문

1. hold / held Hold on your study pattern, then it will give you a success. The father held his son's hand because he had passed his hand to his father. 2. home country Korea, my home country has been developed at culture industry such as K-Pop 3. social issue Recently, environment problem is one of the the most important social issues. 4. nuclear family The member of family have been changed big family to nuclear family in modern society. 5. raise children All parents should have responsibility that raise their children in a good way.

강사 첨삭

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Cheers!
Jean 



1. hold / held
Hold on your study pattern, then it will give you a success. 

>> If you make your study habit a part of your routine, it will lead you to success.

  
  The father held his son\'s hand because he had passed his hand to his father.
>> When the son reached for his father\'s hand, the old man held on to it.

>> or: When the son reached for his father\'s hand, the latter held on to it. [more formal]


 2. home country
Korea, my home country has been developed at culture industry such as K-Pop
>> Korea, my home country, has a developed popular culture industry such as K-Pop.


 3. social issue
Recently, environment problem is one of the the most important social issues.
>> or: Environment problem is one of the most important social issues recently.


 4. nuclear family
The member of family have been changed big family to nuclear family in modern society.
>> Families have change from big to nuclear ones in modern society.


 5. raise children
All parents should have responsibility that raise their children in a good way.

>> All parents should raise their children in a good way.

>> or: Parents have the responsibility to raise their children in a positive way.

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