Homework - \'earliest memory\'
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I enjoyed reading your composition. You wrote something that was directly relevant to the question. I simply made some corrections to your sentences so you can polish them next time. In addition, I found the second memory funny, and instances like that happen typically in elementary and middle schools. It\'s a good thing you\'re not involved in that trouble.
-Chammy
Wow,, actually, i know the first that there is a homework every class.
>> Wow! Actually, I knew from the start that there would be homework in every class.
so.. i saw the homework\'s topic. that was \'earliest memory\'
>> So, I saw the homework topic that was about \'earliest memory\'
honestly, i can\'t understand this question. so i\'m gonna tell about anything.
>> Honestly, I can\'t understand this question. So, I\'m gonna tell you about
anything.
What i can remember when i was elemental student. that time, i played a lot of games with my school friends.
>> What I can remember when I was an elementary student, that time I played a lot of games with my school friends.
i\'m talking, PC game in the PC room, real soccer game and real basketball game. you name it.
>> I’m talking about, PC game in the PC room, a real soccer game, and a real basketball game. You name it.
so that was really fun and happy.
>>So that was really fun and happy.
i remembered one more. there are two my friends in the elemental school.
>> I remembered one more. There are two of my friends in the elementary school.
i\'m gonna call my friends A and B.
>>I’m gonna call my friends A and B.
One day, they went to fight to the school playground.. so i went to look around them.
>>One day, they got into a fight on the school playground. So, I went to look around them.
As soon as i got there, A floated in the air and kicked B.
>>As soon as I got there, A floated in the air and kicked B.
B was knocked down by his kick.
>>Correct
everyone in there was surprised because B wan not a weak person.
>> Everyone in there was surprised because B is not a weak person.
since something surprising happened that time, i can remember that time.
>> Since it happened, I cannot forget that time.
Than you for reading my writing.
>>Thank you for reading my writing.
OR
>> Thank you for reading my composition.
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