Homework - How did you spend you long holiday?

2017-05-09 · 첨삭 강사 Jacey

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Hello,Jacey :) This holiday was really long like a short vacation. I don`t work these days but I also felt excited during this holiday. As I told you today class, I worked at Japanese restaurant for a week from last month. So I went to work by May 2nd. May 3rd was Buddha's Birthday but I believe God and go to mass even it is not every Sunday. So it was just a holiday for me! I went to the theater watching "Guardians of the Galaxy 2". I really enjoyed it. Especially one of the main character,"Groot" was super adorable. I`d like to recommend you to check this out. On last Friday, I learned how to ride a bicycle. It was second try but I still felt nervous a lot. It was similar feeling that I learned swimming. I learned those sports very late but I proud of myself. I will buy a bicycle for me! :) Today class was casual and I like that way. I have a request. I use my cell phone and the volume is max but today I could not hear you sometimes. so please tell me more loudly during class.

강사 첨삭


Hello there, beautiful ACRINA! :)

Thanks for doing you homework.

It seems you had a lot of fun during the long holiday.

I also don\'t know how to ride a bicycle. :p

I tried once but, I fell and I scraped my knee.

It was painful so I never tried rising a bicycle again.

I will take note of your request.

Enjoy the rest of your Thursday afternoon.

Take care! :)


Happily,

Teacher Jacey ^_^)/



Hello,Jacey :)
>> Hello, Jacey.


This holiday was really long like a short vacation.

>> Correct!

>> OR : This holiday was really long. It was more like a short vacation.


I don`t work these days but I also felt excited during this holiday.
>> Correct!


As I told you today class, I worked at Japanese restaurant for a week from last month.

>> Correct!


So I went to work by May 2nd. 
>> Correct!


May 3rd was Buddha\'s Birthday but I believe God and go to mass even it is not every Sunday.

>> May 3rd was Buddha\'s Birthday but I believe in God and I go to mass even if it is not every Sunday.


So it was just a holiday for me! I went to the theater watching \"Guardians of the Galaxy 2\".

>> So it was just a holiday for me! I went to the theater and watched \"Guardians of the Galaxy 2.\"


I really enjoyed it. Especially one of the main character,\"Groot\" was super adorable.

>> I really enjoyed it, especially one of the main characters named \"Groot\", who was super adorable.


I`d like to recommend you to check this out.
>> I\'d like to recommend you to check it out.


On last Friday, I learned how to ride a bicycle.

>> Last Friday, I learned how to ride a bicycle.


It was second try but I still felt nervous a lot.

>> It was my second try but I still felt really nervous.

>> OR : It was my second try but I still felt a lot of nervousness.


It was similar feeling that I learned swimming.

>> It was a similar feeling when I learned swimming.


I learned those sports very late but I proud of myself.

>> I learned those sports very late but I am proud of myself.


I will buy a bicycle for me! :)
>> Correct!


Today class was casual and I like that way.

>> Today\'s class was casual and I like it that way.


I have a request.

>> Correct!


I use my cell phone and the volume is max but today I could not hear you sometimes.

>> I use my cellphone in maximum volume but today I could not hear you sometimes.


so please tell me more loudly during class.

>> So please speak more loudly during class.

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