Homework - money

2023-03-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jhozel

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Can money buy happiness? Yes, I think money can buy happiness, because when I\'m stressed out about work or family stuff, I go shopping or traveling and it takes the stress away, because it all takes money to do it here. How often do you worry about money? I don\'t usually worry too much about money, because I spend when I have money in my bank account and don\'t spend when I don\'t have much in it. And when I have to spend big, like when I go on a trip abroad or buy a piece of furniture like a couch, I bully my husband into contributing to an emergency fund.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Sophia!
Thank you for completing your homework.  
Have a great weekend! ^^
-T.Jhozel 
Can money buy happiness?
Yes, I think money can buy happiness,
>> Correct!
OR: Yes, I do believe that money can buy happiness.
because when I\'m stressed out about work or family stuff, I go shopping or traveling and it takes the stress away, because it all takes money to do it here.
>> Correct!
OR: After all, when I\'m stressed out about work or family matters, I\'ll go shopping or take a trip to relieve the stress.
How often do you worry about money?
I don\'t usually worry too much about money, because I spend when I have money in my bank account and don\'t spend when I don\'t have much in it. 
>> Correct!
OR: 
I rarely worry too much about money because I spend when I have money in my bank account and refrain from doing so when I don\'t.
And when I have to spend big, like when I go on a trip abroad or buy a piece of furniture like a couch, I bully my husband into contributing to an emergency fund.
>> Correct!
OR: 
And when I have to make large purchases, like when I travel abroad or purchase furniture like a couch, I convince my husband into contributing money to a savings account.

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