homework 01.04
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think it is okay for collectors to buy and sell items for profit? Why or why not?
A few years ago, I was crazy about collecting shoes.
Even, I waited for hours to raffle for buy I wanted shoes.
Luckily, I won better than other people.
I liked the collecting shoes the biggest reason is money.
Many people want get rare shoes, but these shoes ridiculously expensive.
Because these shoes are not easy to get.
So, many winning people doing profit from selling again the winning shoes and clothes to other people.
Anyway, I think it\'s OK for collectors to buy and sell items for profit.
But, I\'ve lost interest it reason is that it\'s ridiculously expensive these days.
강사 첨삭
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Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think it is okay for collectors to buy and sell items for profit? Why or why not?
A few years ago, I was crazy about collecting shoes.
Please answer the question:
Do you think it is okay for collectors to buy and sell items for profit? Why or why not?
A few years ago, I was crazy about collecting shoes.
>> CORRECT!
Even, I waited for hours to raffle for buy I wanted shoes.
>> I even waited for hours for the raffle to buy the shoes I wanted.
Luckily, I won better than other people.
>> Luckily, I won the raffle.
I liked the collecting shoes the biggest reason is money.
>> I liked collecting shoes, and the biggest reason is money.
Many people want get rare shoes, but these shoes ridiculously expensive.
>> Many people want get rare shoes, but these shoes are ridiculously expensive.
Because these shoes are not easy to get.
>> It\'s because these shoes are not easy to get.
So, many winning people doing profit from selling again the winning shoes and clothes to other people.
>> So, many people who won the raffle do profit from selling the items again to other people.
Anyway, I think it\'s OK for collectors to buy and sell items for profit.
Anyway, I think it\'s OK for collectors to buy and sell items for profit.
>> CORRECT!
But, I\'ve lost interest it reason is that it\'s ridiculously expensive these days.
>> But, I\'ve lost interest in it, and the reason is that it\'s ridiculously expensive these days.
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