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2024-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What do you like best about business trips? If go on a business trip, I like conversation to many people. I have little experience business trip and my English skill is not fluent. Instead, these days I\'m learning speaking English skill from Camille teacher. So, thanks to my English teacher, I can talk to foreigners. That\'s why I like this kind of situation. And, the next I like thing is traveling. In normal, case of my family if goes on a business trip to abroad, we will do travel. And always If get a chance go on a overseas business trip, I want to go together. It because, I\'m fall in love traveling, recently.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you like best about business trips?

If go on a business trip, I like conversation to many people.
>> When I go on a business trip, I like making a conversation with other people.
I have little experience business trip and my English skill is not fluent.
>> I have a little experience going on a business trip, and my English skill is not that enough.
Instead, these days I\'m learning speaking English skill from Camille teacher.
>> Instead, these days I\'m learning and enhancing my English speaking skill from Teacher Camille.
So, thanks to my English teacher, I can talk to foreigners.
>> CORRECT!
That\'s why I like this kind of situation.
>> CORRECT!
And, the next I like thing is traveling.
>> And, the next thing like is traveling.
In normal, case of my family if goes on a business trip to abroad, we will do travel.
>> Normally, in the case of my family, when we go on a business trip abroad, we do traveling.
And always If get a chance go on a overseas business trip, I want to go together.
>> And, if I get the chance to go on a business trip overseas, I want to go together with my family.
It because, I\'m fall in love traveling, recently.
>> That\'s because recently, I have fallen in love with traveling.

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