homework 01.18
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Can over-eating reduce stress?
Usually many people doesn\'t eat healthy food when they over-eating.
Mostly their eat oily food such as pizza, hamburger, and fried chicken.
Because almost healthy foods such as salads, vegetable, fruits can\'t win fatty foods visually and taste.
Maybe we will feel good the moment when we eating high-calorie foods.
But as a result, I think this behavior is more give the stressful.
And, if we are addicted to unhealthy food, our health will be bad and we will want only oily food.
Pleasure is good, but it\'s hard to escape of it.
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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Can over-eating reduce stress?
Usually many people doesn\'t eat healthy food when they over-eating.
Please answer the question:
Can over-eating reduce stress?
Usually many people doesn\'t eat healthy food when they over-eating.
>> Usually many people doesn\'t eat healthy food when they are over-eating.
Mostly their eat oily food such as pizza, hamburger, and fried chicken.
>> Most of the time, they eat oily food such as pizza, hamburger, and fried chicken.
Because almost healthy foods such as salads, vegetable, fruits can\'t win fatty foods visually and taste.
>> That\'s because most healthy food such as salads, vegetables, and fruits can\'t win over fatty food because they aren\'t visually appealing.
Maybe we will feel good the moment when we eating high-calorie foods.
>> Maybe we will feel good the moment we eat high-calorie food.
But as a result, I think this behavior is more give the stressful.
>> But as a result, I think this behavior is more stressful.
OR >> But as a result, I think this behavior gives us more stress.
And, if we are addicted to unhealthy food, our health will be bad and we will want only oily food.
>> And, if we are addicted to unhealthy food, our health will be bad and we will only crave for oily food.
Pleasure is good, but it\'s hard to escape of it.
>> Pleasure is good, but it\'s hard to escape from it.
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