homework 01.25

2024-01-26 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Is there a kind of place (a country/city) that you will never visit? I like traveling. Which is why I feel interesting to different countries and learn the culture. So my bucket list is travel to around the world. But, I\'m never visit to dangerous countries. For example, I\'m never visit a country in civil war or high crime rate country. The reason why, point of view from a foreigner\'s, if I happen an accident, it is not easy to solve it by oneself. So, I don\'t want to go for safety and prevent accident. I hope peace to everyone.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Is there a kind of place (a country/city) that you will never visit?

I like traveling.

>> CORRECT!

Which is why I feel interesting to different countries and learn the culture.

>> Which is why I feel interested in going to different countries and learning their culture.

So my bucket list is travel to around the world.

>> So, one of the things in my bucket list is to travel around the world.

But, I\'m never visit to dangerous countries.

>> But, I will never visit dangerous countries.

OR >> But, I will never go to dangerous countries.

For example, I\'m never visit a country in civil war or high crime rate country.

>> For example, I\'m not going to visit a country in a civil war or a country with a high crime rate.

The reason why, point of view from a foreigner\'s, if I happen an accident, it is not easy to solve it by oneself.

>> The reason is that, from the point of view of a foreigner, if I happen to be in an accident, it is not easy to solve it by oneself.

So, I don\'t want to go for safety and prevent accident.

>> So, I don\'t want to go there also for safety purposes, and to prevent accidents.

I hope peace to everyone.

>> I am hoping for peace to everyone.

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