Homework 01/26: essay "When I feel depressed"

2016-01-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

학생이 쓴 원문

Friend Jeny. I first do my homework today. Thanks for your commend. and I am going to keep applying in my daily life what i learn everyday if possible. you know there is no environment to apply it like a place, a situation, and so on. I heard the temperature ,12 degrees,there, Be careful of cold. See you tomorrow. = body = When you feel depressed, I first stop what i am doing. and then if having a long hair, I go out to get a haircut. and then I sometimes listen to music like classical music, beautiful and calm music, and so on. and then i sometimes exercise with music, like running, lift up dumbbell and handstand, etc. when blood flows upside down, i feel good. when others see me, they maybe say "Are you crazy ? ".. and finally i sleep like log. Anyway, When I feel depressed, I let myself escape from current situation and i try not to think of it any more.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Oh^^

I love the way you explained your opinion about our topic today.

Thanks for doing this even though you have a busy schedule.

I appreciate that much. I want you to study the corrections here and

feel free to ask me about it tomorrow^^ Have a good evening and see you in class!

Teacher Jeny

Friend Jeny.

>>correct
I first do my homework today.

>>I did my homework first.
Thanks for your commend.

>>Thanks for you comment.

and I am going to keep applying in my daily life what i learn everyday if possible.

>>If possible, I am going to apply what I\'ve learned in my daily life.
you know there is no environment to apply it like a place, a situation, and so on.

>>You know, I don\'t have a chance to apply it like a place, situation and so on.
I heard the temperature ,12 degrees,there, Be careful of cold.

>>I heard that the temperature there is 12 degrees. Be careful of the cold weather.

See you tomorrow.
>>correct
= body =
When you feel depressed, I first stop what I am doing.

>>When I feel depress, I first stop what I am doing.
and then if having a long hair, I go out to get a haircut.

>>Then if my hair is long, I go out for a haircut.
and then I sometimes listen to music like classical music, beautiful and calm music, and so on.

>>I sometimes listen to classical, beautiful and calm music.
and then i sometimes exercise with music, like running, lift up dumbbell and handstand, etc.

>>I also do exercise like running, lifting dumbbell and hand standing while listening to music.
when blood flows upside down, i feel good.

>>When my blood is circulating well, I feel good.
when others see me, they maybe say \"Are you crazy ? \"..

>>Others would find me crazy and they might ask, \"Are you crazy?\"
and finally i sleep like log.
>>Finally, I can sleep like a log.
Anyway, When I feel depressed, I let myself escape from current situation and i try not to think of it any more.

>>Anyway, when I fell depress, I let myself escape from my current situation and try not to think of it anymore.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기