homework 02.15
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think it’s necessary to have a gym membership to stay fit?
If we don\'t have a special hobby, I think it\'s good way to have exercise hobby.
In my opinion, the potential of the hobby of exercising is endless.
If we did hard exercise and feel changes and get health in our bodies, we will feel like we are getting a big reward.
And, I think this feeling also affects mental health.
For example, we will always have a positive mind.
If you don\'t know how to doing exercise, rather I think it\'s good to go to the gym.
Because we can experience most of the exercise at the gym.
However, the will and persistence are important.
I also failed a lot.
Because, I often give up when exercising interesting changed not fun.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
If you don\'t know how to doing exercise, rather I think it\'s good to go to the gym.I also failed a lot.Because, I often give up when exercising interesting changed not fun.
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think it’s necessary to have a gym membership to stay fit?
If we don\'t have a special hobby, I think it\'s good way to have exercise hobby.
Please answer the question:
Do you think it’s necessary to have a gym membership to stay fit?
If we don\'t have a special hobby, I think it\'s good way to have exercise hobby.
>> If we don\'t have a special hobby, I think it\'s a good way to have exercise as a hobby.
In my opinion, the potential of the hobby of exercising is endless.
>> CORRECT!
If we did hard exercise and feel changes and get health in our bodies, we will feel like we are getting a big reward.
>> If we exercise hardly and feel changes. and get our bodies in good shape, we will feel like we are getting a big reward.
And, I think this feeling also affects mental health.
>> And, I think this feeling also affects our mental health.
For example, we will always have a positive mind.
>> CORRECT!
>> If you don\'t know how to do exercises, I think it\'s good to go to the gym.
Because we can experience most of the exercise at the gym.
>> It\'s because we can experience most of the exercises at the gym.
However, the will and persistence are important.
>> CORRECT!
>> CORRECT!
>> Because, I often give up when exercising is not interesting anymore, or if it\'s not fun.
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