homework 02.19

2024-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What fears do you have for the future? As for me own dream and ambition, I want to live a leisurely life. When I was student I didn\'t know that, but now days I think about it, my parent\'s support is really appreciated and great things. So in the future, I will help to my parents, family, and around people who helped to me. Before that, I will have to get a good job or succeed in the my own business in order to do what I want. But somethings makes me nervous these days it that I don\'t know what to do, and time doesn\'t wait for me. So, these things make me fear. Nevertheless, I think I need to overcome and endure these anxiety for grow.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What fears do you have for the future?

As for me own dream and ambition, I want to live a leisurely life.

>> As for my own dream and ambition, I want to live a convenient life.

When I was student I didn\'t know that, but now days I think about it, my parent\'s support is really appreciated and great things.

>> When I was a student I didn\'t know that, but nowadays I think about it, my parents\' support is really appreciated and it\'s a great thing for me.

So in the future, I will help to my parents, family, and around people who helped to me.

>> So in the future, I will help my parents, family, and the people who helped me.

Before that, I will have to get a good job or succeed in the my own business in order to do what I want.

>> Before that, I should get a good job or succeed in my own business in order to do what I want.

But somethings makes me nervous these days it that I don\'t know what to do, and time doesn\'t wait for me.

>> But some things make me nervous these days that I don\'t know what to do, and time doesn\'t wait for me.

So, these things make me fear.

>> So, these things make me feel afraid.

Nevertheless, I think I need to overcome and endure these anxiety for grow.

>> Nevertheless, I think I need to overcome and endure this anxiety for it not to grow.

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