homework 02.22

2024-02-22 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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Writing Task: Please answer the question: What clothing item do you think every person should have in their wardrobe? I think every one should have closet are thin jackets like a windbreaker. I think this kind of jacket has a lot of benefits. For example, we can use it at this season. It\'s a rainy season in summer and a season with big gap temperature differences like spring and autumn. Almost rainy season is summer. But, even if it\'s summer, sometimes it\'s cold on rainy days. At time like this, a thin jacket helps will be maintain body temperature. The spring and autumn the temperature difference between morning and after noon is big. So I think it\'s useful on days when we doing a lot of outdoor activities. Another advantage is that some has sensitive skin people wear these jacket in summer instead of applying sunscreens. But, I can never wear a jacket in humid summer. Because I can\'t endure heat rash.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What clothing item do you think every person should have in their wardrobe?

I think every one should have closet are thin jackets like a windbreaker.
>> I think what everyone should have in their closets are thin jackets like windbreakers.
I think this kind of jacket has a lot of benefits.
>> CORRECT!
For example, we can use it at this season.
>> For example, we can use it in this season.
It\'s a rainy season in summer and a season with big gap temperature differences like spring and autumn.
>> It\'s the rainy season in summer and the season with a big gap temperature difference like spring and autumn.
Almost rainy season is summer.
>> Rainy season is usually in summer.
But, even if it\'s summer, sometimes it\'s cold on rainy days.
>> CORRECT!
At time like this, a thin jacket helps will be maintain body temperature.
>> At time like this, a thin jacket helps to maintain the body temperature.
The spring and autumn the temperature difference between morning and after noon is big.
>> In spring and autumn, the temperature difference between the morning and the afternoon is big.
So I think it\'s useful on days when we doing a lot of outdoor activities.
>> So I think it\'s useful on days when we do a lot of outdoor activities.
Another advantage is that some has sensitive skin people wear these jacket in summer instead of applying sunscreens.
>> Another advantage is that some have sensitive skins, so people wear these jackets in the summer instead of applying sunscreens.
But, I can never wear a jacket in humid summer.
>> But, I can never wear a jacket in humid summer days.
Because I can\'t endure heat rash.
>> CORRECT!

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