homework 02.23

2023-02-23 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What factors influence a career choice? I think the ideal job choice is have the job i want. But, I heard that reality is not easy. So, too many people choose for money or material consequences. It\'s because of between the ideal and the reality.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What factors influence a career choice?

I think the ideal job choice is have the job i want.

>> I think the most ideal job is to have the job I want.

But, I heard that reality is not easy.

>> CORRECT!

So, too many people choose for money or material consequences.

>> So, too many people choose money or material things.

It\'s because of between the ideal and the reality.

>> It\'s because that is between fantasy and reality.

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