homework 02.27

2024-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What changes do you notice in nature during spring? Strangely, when the seasons change, the nature landscape changes too. We can see easy are the trees and grass outside. Become in autumn, the tree leaves color turn red and yellow. After that, the leaves fall out until winter. Next, the case of grass, it grows too fast in summer. So, we should weeding often. And then later the time goes by and autumn, the growth speed slows, and the grass color, it becomes brown. Again as time goes by and spring comes, we can see again the flowers, leaves of the plant. And the grass color is green again. In addition, the sky becomes a more gray color. It because, yellow dust and fine dust get worse in spring.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What changes do you notice in nature during spring?

Strangely, when the seasons change, the nature landscape changes too.
>> Strangely, when the seasons change, the natural landscape changes too.
We can see easy are the trees and grass outside.
>> We can easily see that trees and grass outside.
Become in autumn, the tree leaves color turn red and yellow.
>> In autumn, the leaves\' color turns red and yellow.
After that, the leaves fall out until winter.
>> CORRECT!
Next, the case of grass, it grows too fast in summer.
>> Next, grasses grow too fast in summer.
So, we should weeding often.
>> So, we should weed them often.
And then later the time goes by and autumn, the growth speed slows, and the grass color, it becomes brown.
>> And then later, as the time goes by until autumn, the growth\'s speed slows, and the grass\' color becomes brown.
Again as time goes by and spring comes, we can see again the flowers, leaves of the plant.
>> And when spring comes, we can see again the flowers and the leaves of the plants.
And the grass color is green again.
>> CORRECT!
In addition, the sky becomes a more gray color.
>> In addition, the sky becomes more grayish.
It because, yellow dust and fine dust get worse in spring.
>> It\'s because of the yellow dust and fine dust that get worse in spring.

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