homework 02.28

2024-02-29 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What computer feature do you like best? I think the invention of the computer is the best invention. Now days, it\'s a big part of everyday life. We can study, listen to music and watch movies to using the computer. And, among the feature of computer, I like feature is internet network. Because, if some computer does not have internet feature, this computer just piece of junk. Through the Internet, I can do things like studying, playing game, and working. And thanks to the internet, I had a chance to communicate with various people. That\'s why I think that is the best function is the internet network.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What computer feature do you like best?

I think the invention of the computer is the best invention.
>> CORRECT!
Now days, it\'s a big part of everyday life.
>> Nowadays, it\'s a big part of our everyday lives.
We can study, listen to music, and watch movies to using the computer.
>> We can study, listen to music, and watch movies using the computer.
And, among the feature of computers, I like feature is internet network.
>> And, among the feature of computers, the feature that I like best is the connection to an internet network.
Because, if some computer does not have internet feature, this computer just piece of junk.
>> Because, if a computer does not have an internet feature, this computer is just a piece of junk.
Through the Internet, I can do things like studying, playing games, and working.
>> CORRECT!
And thanks to the internet, I had a chance to communicate with various people.
>> CORRECT!
That\'s why I think that is the best function is the internet network.
>> That\'s why I think the best function is the internet network.

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