homework 03.01

2024-03-05 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: How does dementia affect a person’s daily life? I think the dementia is a sad disease. Most dementia have a harder time to the family around patients than do. This means that most dementia patients don\\\'t know well if they has sick. And, their behavior, memory and speaking style are becoming more and more child. Healthy old people don\\\'t need a guardian all day. But, the dementia patients must need a guardian. Because, these patients can\\\'t live alone. Actually, we already know well. Investing our own time to take care of our family members or patients is a difficult choice. And it\\\'s receive with a lot of stress. Sadly, a lot of miserable reality comes out on the news. That\\\'s why I was mentioned that this is a sad disease.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How does dementia affect a person’s daily life?

I think the dementia is a sad disease.
>> I think dementia is a sad disease.
Most dementia have a harder time to the family around patients than do.
>> Most patients with dementia have a hard time around their family members.
This means that most dementia patients don\\\'t know well if they has sick.
>> This means that most dementia patients don\'t know well if they are sick.
And, their behavior, memory and speaking style are becoming more and more child.
>> And, their behavior, memory and speaking style are becoming more like a child.
Healthy old people don\'t need a guardian all day.
>> CORRECT!
But, the dementia patients must need a guardian.
>> But, dementia patients must need a guardian.
Because, these patients can\'t live alone.
>> CORRECT!
Actually, we already know well.
>> Actually, we already know it well.
Investing our own time to take care of our family members or patients is a difficult choice.
>> CORRECT!
And it\'s receive with a lot of stress.
>> And we receive a lot of stress.
Sadly, a lot of miserable reality comes out on the news.
>> CORRECT!
That\'s why I was mentioned that this is a sad disease.
>> That\'s why I have mentioned that this is a sad disease.

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