homework 03.07

2023-03-07 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What is the worst movie you have watched? I watched the worst movie is the Korean movie \" Bicycle King of Um-Bok-Dong\". The movie is based on the true story of Um-Bok-dong. He is a cyclist worked in Korea during the japanese colonial period. This movie reason why the worst is actor\'s acting skills, boring story and He is actually a criminal. But, he is not a felon. The movie showing him as a hero, The reality is that he has a habit stole a bicycle. So, he was sentenced to prison. And the movie failed with a small audience of 170,000. So, the meme of 170,000 = 1UBD(abbreviation of his name) once popular.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What is the worst movie you have watched?

I watched the worst movie is the Korean movie \" Bicycle King of Um-Bok-Dong\".
>> The worst movie that I have watched is the Korean movie \" Bicycle King of Um-Bok-Dong\".
The movie is based on the true story of Um-Bok-dong.
>> CORRECT!
He is a cyclist worked in Korea during the japanese colonial period.
>> 
He is a cyclist who worked in Korea during the Japanese colonial period.
This movie reason why the worst is actor\'s acting skills, boring story and
He is actually a criminal. 
>> The reason why this movie is the worst is because of the actor\'s acting skills, boring story, and he is actually a criminal.
But, he is not a felon.
>> CORRECT!
The movie showing him as a hero,
>> The movie shows that he is a hero.
The reality is that he has a habit stole a bicycle.
>> The reality is that he has a habit of stealing a bicycle.
So, he was sentenced to prison.
>> CORRECT!
And the movie failed with a small audience of 170,000.
>> CORRECT!
So, the meme of 170,000 = 1UBD(abbreviation of his name) once popular.
>> CORRECT!

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