homework 03.22

2023-03-23 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What do you know about Korean drinking culture? Let me introduce Korean drinking etiquette that I know. In Korea, drinking etiquette exists. When the other person is older than me or when I face my a senior at work For example, when who fill a glass with alcohol, I always have to hold it both hands and I hve to turn my head when I drinking. There are many other manners. But I hate this etiquette. Because most of these cultures created by ondescending old man. But, they are give me some pocket money, I tend to adjust their posture.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you know about Korean drinking culture?


Let me introduce Korean drinking etiquette that I know.
>> CORRECT!
In Korea, drinking etiquette exists.
>> CORRECT!
When the other person is older than me or when I face my a senior at work
>> It is a drinking etiquette wherein the other person is older than me or when I face my senior at work.
For example, when who fill a glass with alcohol, I always have to hold it
both hands and I hve to turn my head when I drinking.
>>  For example, when I fill a glass with alcohol, I always have to hold it with both hands and I have to turn my head when I\'m drinking.
There are many other manners. But I hate this etiquette.
>> There are many other manners, but I hate this etiquette.
Because most of these cultures created by ondescending old man.
>> That\'s because most of these cultures are created by condescending old men.
But, they are give me some pocket money, I tend to adjust their posture.
>> But, they give me some pocket money, so I tend to adjust with the culture.

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