homework 04.18
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think online shopping is more convenient than traditional shopping?
When I was young the shopping malls and traditional markets in my neighborhood are crowded people.
But, these days, many people use online malls.
There are many reason why online malls is popular.
Typically, if I have a smartphone or computer, I can shopping anywhere wherever I am.
Next reason is the online malls are cheaper than offline malls.
In addition, these days deliveries are too fast.
That\'s why many people more prefer online shopping.
In one side, I feel It leaves a lot to be desired.
These days, people don\'t go outside often.
Because they feel tired of meeting people.
And trying to solve everything use to online.
So I think many people\'s emotions got cold.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think online shopping is more convenient than traditional shopping?
When I was young, the shopping malls and traditional markets in my neighborhood are crowded people.
Please answer the question:
Do you think online shopping is more convenient than traditional shopping?
When I was young, the shopping malls and traditional markets in my neighborhood are crowded people.
>> When I was young, the shopping malls and traditional markets in my neighborhood are crowded with people.
But, these days, many people use online malls.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> But, these days, many people use online stores.
There are many reason why online malls is popular.
>> There are many reasons why online malls are popular.
Typically, if I have a smartphone or computer, I can shopping anywhere wherever I am.
>> Typically, if I have a smartphone or computer, I can do online shopping anywhere wherever I am.
OR >> Typically, if I have a smartphone or computer, I can do online shopping anytime, anywhere.
Next reason is the online malls are cheaper than offline malls.
>> CORRECT!
In addition, these days deliveries are too fast.>> CORRECT!
That\'s why many people more prefer online shopping.>> CORRECT!
In one side, I feel It leaves a lot to be desired.>> CORRECT!
These days, people don\'t go outside often.>> CORRECT!
Because they feel tired of meeting people.>> It\'s because they feel tired of meeting people.
And trying to solve everything use to online.
>> And, people try to solve everything online.
So I think many people\'s emotions got cold.
>> CORRECT!
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