homework 04.25

2023-04-26 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are the advantages and disadvantages of online payment systems? The advantage of online payment system is convenient. I use it registering my credit card or bank account on my computer or cell phone. I buy things I want easily. In addition, online shopping malls are cheap, so I usually purchase online. The disadvantages is overspending. Because it\'s simple to pay and online shopping malls are cheap. So, I purchase without thinking. This leads to overspending. In addition, recently, I don\'t use cash, even offline and pay with credit card or smartphone app This also has each other\'s advantages and disadvantages.

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Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of online payment systems?

The advantage of online payment system is convenient.
>> The advantage of online payment system is convenience.
I use it registering my credit card or bank account on my computer or cell phone.
>> CORRECT! 
I buy things I want easily.
>> CORRECT! 
In addition, online shopping malls are cheap, so I usually purchase online.
>> CORRECT! 
The disadvantages is overspending.
>> CORRECT! 
Because it\'s simple to pay and online shopping malls are cheap.
>> That\'s because it\'s simple to pay and online shopping mall prices are cheap.
So, I purchase without thinking. 
>> CORRECT! 
This leads to overspending.
>> CORRECT! 
In addition, recently, I don\'t use cash, even offline and pay with credit card or smartphone app
>> In addition, recently, I don\'t use cash, even for offline transactions and pay with credit card or smartphone app.
This also has each other\'s advantages and disadvantages.
>> CORRECT! 

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