homework 04.25
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you believe that it is important for all countries to have military forces? Why?
I think each country should have military forces.
This is because, basically the role of military is to protect the country and citizens.
But some countries they don\'t have military forces or they can\'t make a formal military forces.
The most reason are political problem or geopolitical issues.
For example, there are several countries like Palau, Liechtenstein, and Palestine.
They don\'t have formal army, instead police the play role of the army or near the other countries help the national defense.
Among the countries don\'t have military, Japan is unique country.
Japan can\'t make normal military forces after losing \"the second world war\".
But, they are made Self-Defense Forces.
This is not called the Army, but it\'s serves as the army.
To sum up, most countries have military forces for protect to their countries.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you believe that it is important for all countries to have military forces? Why?
I think each country should have military forces.
Please answer the question:
Do you believe that it is important for all countries to have military forces? Why?
I think each country should have military forces.
>> CORRECT!
This is because, basically the role of military is to protect the country and citizens.>> CORRECT!
But some countries they don\'t have military forces or they can\'t make a formal military forces.>> But for some countries, they don\'t have military forces or they can\'t make formal military forces.
The most reason are political problem or geopolitical issues.
>> The biggest reasons are political problems and geopolitical issues.
For example, there are several countries like Palau, Liechtenstein, and Palestine.
>> CORRECT!
They don\'t have formal army, instead police the play role of the army or near the other countries help the national defense.>> They don\'t have a formal army, and instead, police officers play the role of the army or other neighboring countries help in the national defense.
Among the countries don\'t have military, Japan is unique country.
>> Among the countries that don\'t have a military, Japan is a unique country.
Japan can\'t make normal military forces after losing \"the second world war\".
>> CORRECT!
But, they are made Self-Defense Forces.>> But, they are made for the Self-Defense Forces.
This is not called the Army, but it\'s serves as the army.
>> This is not called the Army, but it serves as the army.
To sum up, most countries have military forces for protect to their countries.
>> CORRECT!
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