homework 04.28

2023-04-28 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Have you ever tried joining in volunteer work? Yes, I did some volunteer works. When I was teenagers(middle,high school student), I should did volunteer works at school. But, back then I didn\'t like spending time on volunteer work, so I didn\'t do well. After that, I did volunteer works when I was a soldier. One of them is blood donation. It is draw my blood and give it to need people. In fact, if I blood donation, I was get a vacation and some gift product. However, last time I didn\'t do it these days because my body condition became bad after blood donation Anyway, If I get a chance, I want to do other volunteer work.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Have you ever tried joining in volunteer work?


Yes, I did some volunteer works.
>> CORRECT! 
When I was teenagers(middle,high school student), I should did volunteer works at school.
>> When I was a teenager ( middle-high school student), I did some volunteer works at school.
But, back then I didn\'t like spending time on volunteer work, so I didn\'t do well.
>> CORRECT! 
After that, I did volunteer works when I was a soldier.
>> CORRECT! 
One of them is blood donation. 
>> CORRECT! 
It is draw my blood and give it to need people.
>> It is a process of drawing blood and giving it to people in need of blood.
In fact, if I blood donation, I was get a vacation and some gift product.
>> In fact, if I do blood donation, I can get a vacation and some gift products.
However, last time I didn\'t do it these days because my body condition became bad after blood donation
>> However, I don\'t do it these days because my body condition became bad after blood donation.
Anyway, If I get a chance, I want to do other volunteer work.
>> CORRECT! 

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