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2016-04-18 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Is charity a good thing? What are good ways to help people with money? Who needs such help? How can a person make sure the money he gives for charity is used appropriately? I agree that charity is a good thing. Trying to help the vicitims of famine is necessary for our society. In global era, many people have died due to famine, drought or earthquake, etc. To prevent them from dying with the situation, people who have enough money to live become volunteers and then have to help them. The best ways to help people with money is that people send the money to online site related to charity and send the money directly.

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Is charity a good thing? What are good ways to help people with money? Who needs such help? How can a person make sure the money he gives for charity

is used appropriately?
I agree that charity is a good thing.

>>CORRECT!

Trying to help the vicitims of famine is necessary for our society.

>>CORRECT!

In global era, many people have died due to famine, drought or earthquake, etc.

>>CORRECT!

To prevent them from dying with the situation, people who have enough money to live become volunteers and then have to help them.
>>To prevent them from dying from those situations, people who have enough money to live become volunteers and then help them.
The best ways to help people with money is that people send the money to online site related to charity and send the money directly.

>> The best way to help people with money is that people send the money to an online site related to a charity and send the money directly.

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