homework 05.01

2023-05-01 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: How often do you get to enjoy your hobby these days? I usually enjoy many hobbies. It\'s riding a bicycle, listening to music, watching movies, ets. But, many things I want to do, but I don\'t have a enough time in these days. So, I make a plans and enjoy my hobby. For example, I make a plans in the same way as riding a bicycle on weekends, exercising and studying English on weekdays. But, often change my plans It doesn\'t go as plan. Anyways, it\'s comfortable to plan.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How often do you get to enjoy your hobby these days?

I usually enjoy many hobbies.

>> CORRECT!

It\'s riding a bicycle, listening to music, watching movies, ets.

>> It\'s riding a bicycle, listening to music, watching movies, etc.

OR >> It\'s riding a bicycle, listening to music, watching movies, and many more.

But, many things I want to do, but I don\'t have a enough time in these days.

>> There are many things I want to do, but I don\'t have enough time these days.

So, I make a plans and enjoy my hobby.

>> So, I make plans and enjoy my hobby.

For example, I make a plans in the same way as riding a bicycle on weekends, exercising and
studying English on weekdays.

>> For example, I make plans in the same way as riding a bicycle on weekends, exercising, and studying English on weekdays.
But, often change my plans It doesn\'t go as plan.

>> But, I often change my plans when it doesn\'t go as planned.

Anyways, it\'s comfortable to plan.

>> CORRECT!

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