homework 05.02

2024-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Are you a sentimental person? I think I\'m half sentimental person, but half it\'s not. When I\'m sentimental, I usually watch movies, books, paintings and listen to music. These literary works or art works sometimes give me new felling and new inspiration. So, When I watch those works, my emotion changed sentimental. But, while I meet people who first time or unfamiliar person, I\'m not sentimental. In my opinion, I have a introvert emotion. So I often feel difficult to make a new friends. And I don\'t like make a light relationship friends. This mean is If they are not close friends, I don\'t try meet them well. So, I\'m not sentimental while when I meet new people or strange people.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Are you a sentimental person?

I think I\'m half sentimental person, but half it\'s not.
>> I think I\'m somewhat a sentimental person.
When I\'m sentimental, I usually watch movies, books, paintings, and listen to music.
>> CORRECT!
These literary works or art works sometimes give me new felling and new inspiration.
>> These literary works or artworks sometimes give me a new feeling and new inspiration.
OR >> These literary pieces or works of art sometimes give me a new feeling and new inspiration.
So, when I watch those works, my emotion changed sentimental.
>> So, when I watch those works, my emotion changes and I become sentimental.
But, while I meet people who first time or unfamiliar person, I\'m not sentimental.
>> But, when I meet unfamiliar people, I\'m not sentimental.
In my opinion, I have a introvert emotion.
>> In my opinion, I am an introvert.
So I often feel difficult to make a new friends.
>> So I often find it difficult to make new friends.
And I don\'t like make a light relationship friends.
>> And I don\'t like making a light relationship with friends.
This mean is If they are not close friends, I don\'t try meet them well.
>> This means if they are not my close friends, I don\'t try meeting them well.
So, I\'m not sentimental while when I meet new people or strange people.
>> So, I\'m not sentimental when I am around new or unfamiliar people.

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