homework 05.03
학생이 쓴 원문
~ ~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think some hobbies are dangerous? What are some examples of dangerous hobbies?
I think there are many dangerous hobbies.
For example, there are many things such as sport,fishing, and active hobbies.
I think, if you want have the extreme fun, you have to take risk.
Among them, I think rock climbing without rope,
As far as I know, climbing without rope, Experts they practice the same course many times
and later climb without rope.
But, I think it\'s sport that I can never do. Because, there are no safety device to climb a huge cliff.
It is one of them most dangerous hobbies.
강사 첨삭
Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ ~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think some hobbies are dangerous? What are some examples of dangerous hobbies?
I think there are many dangerous hobbies.
Please answer the question:
Do you think some hobbies are dangerous? What are some examples of dangerous hobbies?
I think there are many dangerous hobbies.
>> CORRECT!
For example, there are many things such as sport,fishing, and active hobbies.
>> For example, there are many things such as sports, fishing, and other active hobbies.
I think, if you want have the extreme fun, you have to take risk.
>> I think, if you want to have extreme fun, you have to take risk.
Among them, I think rock climbing without rope,
>> Among them, I think rock climbing without rope is the most extreme one.
As far as I know, climbing without rope, Experts they practice the same course many times
and later climb without rope.
and later climb without rope.
>> As far as I know, experts practice the same course many times and later climb without rope.
But, I think it\'s sport that I can never do.
But, I think it\'s sport that I can never do.
>> But, I think it\'s a sport that I can never do.
Because, there are no safety device to climb a huge cliff.
>> CORRECT!
It is one of them most dangerous hobbies.>> It is one of the most dangerous hobbies.
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