homework 05.06

2024-05-06 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are your best childhood memories? If I go back in time, I want to go back to elementary school age. The reason why when I was young is because I think I didn\'t have nothing to worry and pure at that time. Actually, I don\'t remember what happen and what I did at that time. But, I have only good memories. One of the reasons, I still meeting my friends nowadays I met when I was in child. That\'s why I like my elementary student memories. Sometimes, I want to go back to child age days. And than later if I go to back in the days, right away I will going to buy bitcoin(virtual currencies) and stock.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are your best childhood memories?

If I go back in time, I want to go back to elementary school age.

>> If I go back in time, I want to go back to my elementary school age.

The reason why when I was young is because I think I didn\'t have nothing to worry and pure at that time.

>> The reason why I want to go back to that time is because when I was young, I think I didn\'t have nothing to worry about, and my mind was pure at that time.

Actually, I don\'t remember what happened and what I did at that time.

>> CORRECT!
But, I have only good memories.

>> CORRECT!
One of the reasons, I still meeting my friends nowadays I met when I was in child.

>> One of the reasons is that I still meet my friends nowadays that I met when I was a child.

That\'s why I like my elementary student memories.

>> That\'s why I like my elementary school memories.

Sometimes, I want to go back to child age days.

>> Sometimes, I want to go back to childhood days.

And than later if I go to back in the days, right away I will going to buy bitcoin(virtual currencies) and stock.

>> And then later if I go to back in the days, right away I am going to buy bitcoin (virtual currencies) and stocks.

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